Comparing one person to another or one
thing to something better (or worse!) does not work well in real life. In
poetry, however, comparisons can reveal the abstract in visible terms readers
can picture.
First, an example of the nonworkable
way to compare: After my husband and I bought a newly built house with shiny
hardwood floors, we visited my parents, who lived in an older home. As soon as
we arrived, the first thing I noticed was the floors – old and in need of
sanding and re-staining.
A couple of years later, we moved to
an old apartment building in New Orleans with dark, worn wooden flooring. So,
what do you suppose I thought of my parents’ house when we returned to visit?
Yes, I discovered they had nice, bright medium-stained floors, which had not
been redone in years.
That kind of comparison skews our view
and can get us into trouble. For instance, comparing one child or skin color or
church affiliation to another mainly shows our favoritism, prejudice, or
ignorance!
In poetry though, we aim to illustrate
ideas and concepts that cannot be pictured with something that can. For
example, in writing PRAISE! these “pictures” of God came to me.
Praise God Our
Axis –
Around Whom
all things turn
and without Whom
everything gets
off balance –
like an overloaded
washing machine
or earth off its orbit
or a planet spinning
out of control.
and
Praise God Our
Heavenly Fog –
Through Whom we see what’s now
and near and clear enough to touch.
and
Praise Christ Our
Holy Telescope –
Through Whom we clearly see
what’s coming
when we need to know.
Praise Christ our holy
microscope
Who helps us to discern
the true,
the false
in tiny telling detail.
from PRAISE!
by Mary Harwell Sayler, ©2017, published by Cladach Publishing
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expand your own options in writing poetry.
If you’ve been following this blog
(thank you very much!), you’ve most likely seen posts on figurative language expressed in metaphor (this IS that) and simile (this is LIKE that or
similar.) When freshly done, those comparisons reawaken our senses and help
us to be more appreciative of the beauty around us.
Every evening, for instance, my
husband and I sit on the deck overlooking our little lake in hopes of
witnessing a memorable sunset. Some are subtle, some vivid, but many often
evoke comparisons fit for a new haiku:
The low-lying sun
ignites a cotton blanket
of flammable clouds.
…
Pink flying saucers
trailing across the twilight –
landing in the pond.
from Talkingto the Wren: haiku, short verse, and one long poem by Mary HarwellSayler, ©2020, published by Cyberwit.net
Coming up with fresh comparisons will
likely occur if you simply give a poem ample time. Then, meditating on abstract
concepts or carefully observing what can be seen, heard, or felt will elevate
your poems and your awareness of the amazing creation in which we live.
Mary Sayler, ©2020
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